Translation 1:
1)
Diction:
-
“uneasy” – makes the dreams
seem as they were not very pleasant but not to the extent of nightmares
-
“transformed” – represents a
state of not being able to return to human state
-
“gigantic” – a definitive word
to describe how big the bug actually was
-
“insect” – is not very descriptive
and opens it up for interpretation of what it looks like
2)
Syntax:
-
Fluid sentence which lacks commas
and ends in a period instead of an exclamation point. This represents a lack of
excitement and represents a natural tone that lacks attention to a specific
part in the sentence.
3)
Imagery:
-
When it said, “he transformed
in his bed into a gigantic insect” it creates a vision in my mind of a large
praying mantis in my own bed.
4)
Structure:
-
Begins with the statement of
the “uneasy dreams” and how it continued to the discovery of him becoming a “gigantic
bug” the climax of the sentence.
5)
Style:
-
Translation 2:
1)
Diction:
-
“Uneasy” – once again describes
the dreams as a little upsetting rather than of terror
-
“Changed” – a more casual word
choice and can be seen as a temporary state
-
“bug” – open up to interpretation,
less descriptive than insect in my opinion
-
“giant” – very large, draws
comparisons to a “giant” in the literal sense
-
“Gregory” – a more English interpretation
on his name
2)
Syntax:
-
Fluid, short sentence, does not
have any commas and has a period to end. This represents a more casual tone to
the sentence.
3)
Imagery:
-
Makes me think of myself waking
up as a bug, but more or a bug in the sense of a ladybug rather than an insect
like a praying mantis.
4)
Structure:
-
Began with his name and ended
with him becoming a bug, does not have many details and is very straight
forward.
5)
Style:
-
The style of the sentence seems
to be in the most literal sense of interpretation and a very ordinary, English,
interpretation of the sentence.
Translation 3:
1)
Diction:
-
“transformed” – represents a
state of not being able to return to human state
-
“enormous” – another
descriptive word to describe how large the bug is
-
“troubled” – explains how the
dreams were of more worry and contemplation rather than a nightmare
-
“Bug”- open up to interpretation,
less descriptive than insect in my opinion
2)
Syntax:
-
Still a fluid sentence without separation
in commas or other grammar techniques
3)
Imagery:
-
I can physically notice an “enormous
bug” in a sense that is similar to that of the second translation.
4)
Structure:
-
Reflects upon how this event
happened in the past and is chronological in its description
5)
Style:
-
A more complicated description
of the event and is less straight forward than that of the second translation.
Translation 4:
1)
Diction:
-
“agitated” – description of the
dreams in a sense of discomfort and pissed off
-
“upon awakening” – a more structured
use of words and is not a casual or natural word choice
-
“monstrous” – describes the “vermin”
negatively and scary, rather than describing the size of the creature
-
“vermin” - a more problematic description in how this
creature is parasitic (negative connotation)
2)
Syntax:
-
Use of multiple commas to separate
the sentence and draw attention to each specific section of the sentence. This draws
significance to the event.
3)
Imagery:
-
Makes me imagine a creature
more so than a bug or insect in a bed. Through this imagery I can see a fearful
tension in Gregor’s discovery.
4)
Structure:
-
The structure begins with the
awakening of Gregor and continues to his discovery of becoming a “vermin”
5)
Style:
-
The sentence is meticulous in
its nature to represent the event in a way that does not seem to care about the
literal translation of the original sentence.
In analyzing the differing translations in
the novella “Metamorhpis”, I was able
to understand the complications of translating a sentence from one language to
another. Through these differing translations, I cannot clearly understand the
intent of the author in his selective sentence. This sentence seems to be
significant in explaining how Gregor Samsa discovered he was now some sort of
insect or bug. However, because of the contrast in the translations I cannot
clearly depict if Gregor was turned into a bug, insect or vermin. This is only
one example of the alteration in diction between the sentences. This then effects
my own interpretation and how I imagine what this creature looks like. Also,
the variation in the sentences continues in how each sentence differs in the
use of syntax. When I began comparing translation 4 to translation 2; I realized
translation 4 uses a syntax that includes multiple commas that separate the sentence.
However, in translation 2 it is straight forward and does not use any commas to
separate the sentence. In my opinion, sentences that use commas help draw attention
to the reader and determines which parts of the sentence are significant.
Furthermore, in discussing the differences
of the translations, the overall importance in contrast is because of the
message that each portray. Based on the contrasts in diction, syntax, punctuation,
and imagery the message differs in each translation. By using different
literary techniques, the sentence then determines its own message. This is because
the overall mood of the sentences differs based on the elements in each, this also
contributes to the effectiveness of the translations. In my opinion, the fourth
translation was the most effective and the best representation of the original
sentence. This is because of the overall development and use of literary
devices throughout the sentence. The imagery that I was able to see was more
vivid and exciting than that of the other translations. This imagery was
effective based on the use of diction in the words “monstrous”, “agitated” and “vermin”.
Through this word choice I was clearly able to see a developed image in
comparison to that of the word choice in the other translations, like “giant”, “uneasy”
and “bug”, among others. However, in reading these translations I could see the
difficulty in understanding which translation fits best in the author’s overall
purpose. Each translation presents a mood that is original, which is another
reason why I enjoy the fourth translation the most. The tone presented is of a
more serious and tense nature than that of the others. I was able to determine
this through the contrast in the use of commas, as stated in the comparison of
the second and fourth translations. In all, these translations determine their
own unique interpretation of the original sentence in “Metamorphis” effecting the overall conclusion the reader is able to
determine.
Haramabe's death is lost in translation from the language of the gorillas,
Connor Finnegan
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